“For the period 1876–1908, analyze how the Ottoman government viewed ethnic and religious groups within its empire.” The following statement is not an acceptable thesis; it is far too vague.It says very little about how the essay is structured.
From the harbor of Boston during the first stages of the American Revolution to the plantations of Haiti during the struggle to end slavery, people have battled for power.
Even in places like China with the Boxer Rebellion, people were responding against the issue of Westernization. These two sentences address both the religious and ethnic aspects of the question. The Ottoman government took the same position on religious diversity as it did on ethnic diversity.
You have one chance to make a good first impression.
Usually, an AP World History reader can tell within the first few sentences whether or not an essay is going to be strong.
Dark clouds abound, but here and there, there are rays of sunshine. The cars are more reliable than ever before, yet still manage to be engaging and more fun than some of the competition and most owners are satisfied.
Their new engines are renowned and studied and copied by other makers as they really do point a way into an ever more frugal future.
To score well, the thesis needs to include specific information that responds to the question.
Many students think they have written a thesis when, in actuality, they have not; their opening paragraphs are just too general and unspecific.
This next sentence gets the question backward: you are being asked for the government’s view of religious and ethnic groups, not the groups’ view of the government.
Though the point-of-view issue is very important, this statement would not receive POV credit.